Glimpsing Light in the Darkness – A Pantoum

This is an extra post for today in response to the challenge at dVerse Poets’ Pub. The FormForAll lesson for today was on how to write a pantoum. I don’t usually try to write poems in a specific form, and don’t even really know much about different poetic forms, but I’m learning. This form looked interesting and I read a couple of the linked poems that I really liked, so I thought I’d give it a try.

Glimpsing Light in the Darkness

Stumbling in the darkness
Searching for Your light
Perceiving despair’s caress
Filled with dread and fright

Searching for Your light
I know it must be here
Filled with dread and fright
That Your light has disappeared

I know it must be here
Overwhelmed by trepidation
That Your light has disappeared
Then I see Your demonstration

Overwhelmed by trepidation
Not flowing from above
Then I see Your demonstration
Comfort, peace, and love

Not flowing from above
Darkness enveloping me
Comfort, peace, and love
A glimpse of hope I see

Darkness enveloping me
Perceiving despair’s caress
A glimpse of hope I see
Stumbling in the darkness

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19 responses to “Glimpsing Light in the Darkness – A Pantoum

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  2. Darkness and light ~ despair and hope ~ but positive and victorious. Great!

  3. A lovely well formed pantoum Linda. I liked the yo-yoing of emotions and glad it ended on an up :-)

  4. i felt true emotion in your lines Linda – hope for sure and hope is not easy or cheap and you showed this – powered by your sincerity this poem speaks volumes

    • Arron, Thank you. What a nice compliment, that you could feel the emotion. It sometimes scares me how strongly I can still feel those emotions that consumed me when I was severely depressed, but it reminds me to have compassion and spread a message of hope for those still in darkness. Peace, Linda

  5. Gay

    Linda, I may not have mentioned that this type of poem can be epic and go on for as many stanzas as you need. I think it has to be a minimum of three to work; but this was perfect! Your subject was perfectly suited to the form, and I know the wrapping and repetition really worked here. Excellent. G.

    • Gay, Thank you so much for the kind comments! You were such a great teacher in your sharing of the ins and outs of this form. You did mention that the number of stanzas was flexible, and I did add an extra as I worked through it. I am so excited to be learning more about poetry at dVerse. What a great group of people! Peace, Linda

  6. You worked the form well. I too saw the hopefullness within. Great effort !!

  7. You are really rocking this poetry thing! :) I like to do forms, for some reason. I think I like the challenge and the rules to conform to. You did soooo good at this . . .and you just learned it! wow!
    God bless you and your poetry that sings of Him and His hope!

    • Deb, It helped that Gay Cannon was such a good teacher of the form over at dVerse. Normally I don’t like the rules, but this particular form just seemed like it would work for this subject matter. Did I ever thank you for getting me started on poetry in the first place? You were definitely my inspiration! :) Peace, Linda

      • You sweet friend you . . .yes, you have thanked me before. Not sure what I did, but you are welcome! It seems to just come naturally out of you. :) And then you share them so we can read and enjoy and be blessed by them! Wonderful!

  8. this is beautiful…love the rollercoaster of emotion and the spiritual impilcations of your words as well…uplifting…well spun to the form as well…i liked…smiles.

    • Brian, I had to add an extra stanza to get the full rollercoaster with the form. I do like the challenge of fitting a poem into a specific form, but still writing what I know. I hear the sestina is coming back on two weeks. I might have to get started now to pull that one off! Peace, Linda

  9. Linda~ Uplifting and hopeful… great job with the form!

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